Perhaps we are birds of similar feather, so can gather together.

I cannot be qualified as a mentor; however, I cherish the affinity between us.

Talk about mentor, once I had a mentor from July, 2002 to June, 2005. She is an English poet. She is also a patient with ME. Because her bad health I felt guilty to bother her anymore, so I initiatively ended the relationship, but still keep a good friendship with her until now. Ever since I’ve tried to find another mentor, but all my efforts are fruitless.

Your English background is very solid, writing skill is fairly good. I feel lucky can discuss English poetry with you and you actually can help me a lot. I think someday you can even be a much better poet than I.

I am glad to know that you think the change of last word makes the sentence more meaningful. If we add an ‘and’ to the line, the line will be too long and it will break the similarity with the third line. Poetry is better in symmetry.

Motivated by your suggestion, I omit one comma from both the third and fourth line. I think this way can make the two lines smoother to read.

Thank you again for your discussions. They bring to me improvements.

I am glad that you like the English part of my poem. Usually the traslation is worse than the orginal version. This is surely an endorsement to my writing ability in English.

Thank you also for telling me your choice of the corrected version and your correction of ‘with’ instead of ‘a’. Originally I chose the word ‘a’ to coordinate with ‘an’ and ‘all’. I think your change can give a better meaning to the line.

However, after several rewrite, the line gets a new form, punctuations return to their original form. Would you please have a look at it and tell me how do you think about it  now?

Thank you again for your continuing concern to my injury and physical condition. They are recovering well. Most probably won't get any residual sequela.

多谢多硯兄的过奖！

多谢！

試了再試

挑無可挑

这是对写诗人的最高认可。多谢！

四句型式的诗，文意上每句或不完整，文法上多为整句。

此诗的中文部份以不改为宜。英文部分为配合中文部份原亦采用句号。

大侠的建议采用逗号，亦为上策，亦各有利弊，如下：

I spend ten years and plus on writing some poems，

today I send them to my mentor for an examination.

Are those words, sentences, all properly composed,

and rhymes, rhythms, a correct, conformable creation?

我或许会在单独发表时采用。

Thank you very much for your concern and encouragement.

Physically I was temporarily injured. Mentally I was still the same.

多谢您的鼓励，欢迎常来切磋。