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ChiCheng Hsu

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     Watching Snow at Advanced Age    Hsu ChiCheng

A pile of white hair …
Is it?
I feel misty of eyes.

I cannot believe it.
I identify it carefully.
No mistake.
— A pile of white hair.

But, here and now, is it possible?
Still I cannot believe it.
I step forward to identify it carefully.
Still no mistake.
— A pile of white hair.

But, here and now, is it possible?
Still I cannot believe it.
I rub my eyes, and again I identify it carefully.
Still no mistake.
— A pile of white hair.

Identified for three times.
And I have to believe:
It is a pile of white hair.
Just now I must have been dim of eyes.
Alas, winter is here!
Suddenly I tremble under a spell of coldness …

World of Poets 2013/12/25

Panayiota Ryall said:

Panayiota Ryall

Panayiota

Panayiota Ryall

Research Diplomate in Logotherapy and SRN - specializing in adult survivors of child abuse

Watching Snow at Advanced Age ~ Hsu ChiCheng ~Brilliant! I love this poem. I actually came close to tears reading it, with the feeling it evoked in me as I've experience my own unbelievable at times, winter of age. Just yesterday I was a child... thank you for sharing this poem which reminds me of one I once wrote:

THE YEARS THEY DO BEGUILE!
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How on earth did this happen,
That this year I’ll be forty?

A month ago I was a child,
Carefree and wild!

A week ago I was a teen,
Alive and keen!

A day ago I met my lover,
Wife and mother!

And now I sit and ponder,
And now wonder!

Where did the years go?
I’m becoming old and slow!

My joyful youth gone by!
I wonder how and why?

What have I really achieved?
This age I’d not conceived!

The years that lie ahead,
Fill my thoughts with dread!

In my heart I’m still a child,
But the years, they do beguile!

(23rd February 1996)

World of Poets 2014/1/7

Hsu' response:

Dear Panayiota Ryall,
    Many thanks. I just wrote my feeling in watching snow at advange age. The season is winter, and it put snow to cover my head. Oh, I'm in winter age! How fast the time pass!

Hsu ChiCheng

Dear Panayiota Ryall,
    Many thanks. I just wrote my feeling in watching snow at advange age. The season is winter, and it put snow to cover my head. Oh, I'm in winter age! How fast the time pass!

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 Watching Snow at Advanced Age ~ Hsu ChiCheng ~Brilliant! I love this poem. I actually came close to tears reading it, with the feeling...

中文原詩如后:

       老年看雪    許其正

 

一大堆白髮……

是嗎?

我眼前有點模糊

 

我不太敢相信

我仔細辨認

沒錯

——一大堆白髮

 

可是,此時此地,可能嗎?

我還是不太敢相信

我走前去仔細辨認

還是沒錯

——一大堆白髮

 

可是,此時此地,可能嗎?

我還是不太敢相信

我揉揉眼睛,再仔細辨認

還是沒錯

——一大堆白髮

 

已經再三驗證

這下我終於不得不相信:

那是一大堆白髮

我剛才一定是眼花了

唉,原來冬天已到!

我突然被冷得全身顫抖……。

 

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2013/12/28 22:30

很有意境的詩作分享

智慧的髮絲,不畏懼寒冬

祝新年吉祥如意

其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-29 21:28 回覆:
智慧的白髮,令人看了顫抖:時光不再!


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2013/12/28 18:38

冷到髮白~~奸笑(呵呵、嘿嘿)

呵呵呵~~~春天一到隨風而起        在三確認.............是想太多啦~~

其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-29 21:29 回覆:
借老眼昏花來寫對老年時光不再的"顫抖".

犀利呼啦啦
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光陰如梭
2013/12/28 15:07

轉眼間鶴髮如雪

再三確認光陰如梭.........

 

其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-28 17:20 回覆:
老人眼花了,得再三確認.借以隱喻老年到了,頭白並警惕.

Sir Norton 魯賓遜,救命!
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2013/12/27 21:14
驚白髮涼心, 領新願疾行。
其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-28 08:23 回覆:
雪花染白頭,驚心惜寸陰;人生一蜉蝣,狂奔向前行.

冠慧~
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2013/12/27 16:19

智慧的詩 雪白的 雪如白髮

再看一次 原來 冬天來臨

老師創作詩 如此絕妙

感謝分享 願你平安幸福

其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-27 17:00 回覆:

那是雙關或說象徵的書寫:一面寫雪,一面寫白髮(老年).此中微妙相關,讓讀者琢磨意會.

謝謝指教!


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2013/12/27 12:38

謝謝美麗詩作分享

願您在新一年  有著更美好ㄉ新展望  祝福''''( ◕◡◝= )~ Happy weekend...

其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-27 17:01 回覆:

謝謝指教!

祝新年愉快!


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2013/12/26 19:32
「唉!原來冬天已到!我突然被冷得全身顫抖.......」真是精采壓軸,從模糊、揉揉眼睛再到眼花,一步步把我們帶領到冰天雪地的溫度!好喜歡這首詩~
其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-26 20:48 回覆:
是要帶人進冰天雪地中沒錯;但更重要的是,象徵老年這人生的冬天已到.

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其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-26 20:50 回覆:

新的一年就到.祝

新年愉快,事事如意!


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2013/12/26 17:22
願主祝福平安喜樂。
其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-26 20:52 回覆:

新年快樂,福祿雙全!


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2013/12/26 11:45

新年快樂

三太子開心

其正(cchwr131949) 於 2013-12-26 20:53 回覆:

新年快樂,事事如意!

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