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Kitchen

---死亡到最後難道不是

     一個無盡的廚房嗎?(聶魯達.疑問集)

I want to borrow a fire from 燧人氏

To cook  my  poems

My fingers are  all thumbs

This  fire  is  often out  of  control

Sometimes   it’s  too  strong

All  food  becomes  dark

Sometimes   it’s  too  weak

Nothing  can be  cooked

My kitchen knife is  very  sharp

Make myself bleed

And  to  cut  lots  of  onion

Let others burst into  tears

I  am a stubborn  cook

Put too  much water in  my  stews

In  stead of sugar,pepper,sauce……

Look

They  are  colorless  and  tasteless

I  feel  so  frustrated

Desire to leave here

No one  can  run  away God  says

Finally, I  am  going to  cook  my  life

Even  no  one  to  cherish

              

           Ripple  Chao 2008,10,28night

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Thanks for sharing this marvelous peom
2008/11/07 22:39
I want to borrow a fire from Zuirens

To cook my poems

My fingers are all thumbs

The fire is often out of control

Sometimes it’s too strong

All the food becomes burned

Sometimes it’s too weak

Nothing can be cooked

My kitchen knife is sharp enough to

Make myself bleed

And to cut lots of onions

Makes others burst into tears

I am a stubborn cook who

Puts too much water in my stews

Instead of sugar, pepper, sauce….

Look!

They are colorless.

Taste!

They are tasteless, too.

I feel so frustrated

That leaving here is my desire

“No one can run away.” God says.

Finally, I am going to cook my life

Even no one seems to cherish it.



The above poem is my suggestion, but only for you as reference. Actually, your original poem is far better than my suggestion. Besides, I love your conclusion--Everyone has to face the reality to be the cook and cook for his own life, even somehow life frustrates us and we wish to quit. And even no one seems to cherish us, at least we should be the ones who are responsible for our own life and cherish it well. Thanks for sharing your GREAT poem once again. Wish you a great weekend.
趙路得(lude001) 於 2008-11-12 16:46 回覆:

Dear   Helen:

Who  is   Zuirens ???

  i    appreciate   your  correction.

  You  improve   my   Chinese  English.

  Thinks.


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gOOD POEM
2008/10/29 18:10

I am in a rush to school now. Although I have read several times, I still enjoy myself reading again and again. I will come back home with some feedbacks. Thanks for sharing me your GREAT poem.

See you later.

Wish you a great night.

Helen


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gOOD POEM
2008/10/29 18:10

I am in a rush to school now. Although I have read several times, I still enjoy myself reading again and again. I will come back home with some feedbacks. Thanks for sharing me your GREAT poem.

See you later.

Wish you a great night.

Helen

趙路得(lude001) 於 2008-11-07 17:01 回覆:

Dear  Helen:

        Thank you for your  encouragement.How  about  your  feelings after reading  my  second  English  poem? Could  you  share  more??