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初來乍到，先貼一篇自我介紹。雖是舊作，還請多多指教！

遲來的自我介紹 -- 附上批改後的版本

大家認識這麼久了，怎麼現在來個self introduction?

是因為Trinity希望老師們分享一些小文章，刊登在Facebook上。初次登板，就來個自我介紹吧！

(註：我是寫好英文之後，才翻成中文，不完全是直譯。)

My name is Dawn, the time of day when sunlight first appears in the east. Helping people to reach their goals in language acquisition is my career for life.

我的名字是Dawn，意思是朝陽於東方乍現之時。助人達成語言學習目標是我的職志。

Graduated as an education major and English minor from the National Taiwan Normal University, I had taught English in junior high schools in the Taipei metropolitan area for 12 years by the time I decided to take a road less traveled. Ever since then, the decision has proven most appropriate and productive.

我畢業於國立台灣師範大學，主修教育，輔系英文。畢業後在大台北地區的國中教了12年英文，之後決定走一條人煙稀少的路。如今證明這決定正確，而且成果豐碩。

Throughout my school education, the English language was always the one subject that gave me the most challenge and delight. However, my first encounter with this language cannot be depicted as encouraging. I attended junior high with no inkling of it at all, and beyond question my test scores were pretty much a scandal. From there, it was a great leap forward to the full marks I earned at the Joint Entrance Exams to Senior High School. That was my first taste of major success in language learning, and this experience led to the strategy I have adopted up to now—keep outdoing myself; it’s better late than never. Staying in “the comfort zone” is never a member of my gene pool.

在我受教育的過程中，英文這一科向來是挑戰與喜悅的最大來源。不過，我和這語言的初次接觸算不上令人振奮；進入國中時，我對英文毫無概念，考試分數每每是慘不忍睹。從這種程度躍升到高中聯考英文滿分，我往前跳了好大一步。那是我第一次嘗到學語言的成就感，而這個經驗也造就了我一直用到現在的策略：跟自己比；晚一點總比沒有好。我的基因裡沒有「待在舒適區」這一項。

With several other rewarding experiences with language learning in senior high and afterward, I find that teaching language can very well be charity. As the cliché goes, language opens a window to the outside world. Trite as the saying may sound, more than a few people in Taiwan are still waiting for that window to open. Some struggle with this foreign tongue; some simply give up as early as their first year learning it. I was there too, taking my daily dose of frustration. Now that I have my head above water, I’d very much like to pull others out of it as well. This explains why most of my working days end with a smile, because being able to do something for others rocks!

        高中以來，又有幾回很開心的語言學習經驗，現在的我覺得教語言可以算是「做功德」。有句老生常談：「語言開啟了一扇通往世界的窗」，聽起來雖然老掉牙，在台灣卻有滿多人還在等這扇窗子開啟呢。有的人還在跟英文搏鬥，有的人早在剛開始學的時候就放棄了。我也曾天天遭受打擊，但是如今已經浮出水面，很希望能拉其他人一把。所以一天工作結束時，我多半是微笑著下班；能為人做點什麼，這感覺太帥了！

接著是經過專家指點的版本：

My name is Dawn, the time of day when sunlight first appears in the east. Helping people reach their goals in acquiring a second language is my lifelong career.

Graduated with a major in education and minor in English from the National Taiwan Normal University, I had taught English in junior high schools in the greater Taipei area for 12 years before I decided to take a road less traveled. Now time has proven the decision the right track to a fruitful career.

When I was a student, the English language was always the one subject that gave me the most challenge and delight. However, my first encounter with this foreign language wasn’t very encouraging. I entered middle school with no inkling of it at all—my low test scores said it all. But I slowly picked up the pace, and the full mark I earned at the Joint Entrance Exams to Senior High School was a great leap forward. I got my first taste of major success in language learning. One thing that I learned was I wanted to outdo myself, a principle that I still uphold till this very day. Staying in the comfort zone was never in my genes.

Fortunately, I had a few other rewarding experiences with English language learning in high school. After I started teaching, I found that teaching language can very well be doing a good deed. As the cliché goes, language opens a window to the outside world. Trite as the saying may sound, a long line of people in Taiwan are still waiting for that window to open. Some continue to struggle with this foreign tongue; some simply give up after just one year. I was once where they were, taking my daily dose of frustration. Now that I have my head above water, I’d very much like to pull others out of it as well. This explains why most of my working days end with a smile, because being able to do something for others rocks!

老師幫我把詞序做了若干調動，選用簡潔的字眼去置換繁雜字串，刪去文法上可有可無的字，整個節奏就變得明快多了！

給需要寫自傳的朋友：

通常自傳是隨著履歷表一起交給徵人單位的，姓名已經出現在信封或履歷上了，所以自傳第一句不必再寫：我的名字叫某某。而且也不必把爸爸媽媽哥哥姊姊的事情介紹一遍，重點要放在自己的特點上。