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奇怪的冒險(17改編版-I used to hike alone......)
2009/12/10 21:11:24瀏覽378|回應3|推薦5

I used to hike alone......

I take out my cell phone and use my shivering fingers to call 911. Soon a guy answers the phone “Hello?” “I got attack by a wolf in the forest!” “Where are you now?” when I try to answer, my cell phone’s battery died.

I’m Simon. The word “coldness” is not enough to describe what I feel right now.

There’re goose bumps all over my limps and body, it is cause by the cold breeze and my fear. I rub my numbed right foot and left hand slowly, much better.

   It’s so bad that my cell phone’s battery died. No one can come and rescue me.

   I start wondering where’s the god right now. I used to “feel” him when I’m alone, but now...... just forget about it. Now, I am curling myself beside an old decayed tree. My shoulders and my legs feel the rough stones and branches.

   I like to hike alone, well, I mean I used to like hiking. By this time’s accident I would never wand to hike again.

   I just want to have a wonderful holiday, but what I got is a wolf’s attack and wounds; big fleshy and bloody wounds on my right foot and left arm. The worst wound is on my left arm you can see blood come out, just like a little river and flow down my arm just like a tiny waterfall.

    The wind is freezing me, and everything are silence now, except my teeth are shivering “chi chi chi”, there’re no bugs’ buzzing and the bird tweets that are pleasant to hear. It’s really weird; a soundless and hopeless forest. 

    “Sniff sniff” there’s something over there; soon the sniff stop, then is some murmur sound, follow that is high frequency wail. “Is anyone over there?” I ask, the answer I get is “Gr...” I think it means I’m in trouble now. And at the next second, a large furry creature jumps toward me. I take a branch beside me and try to de fence the wolf.

    At first, I’m the one who get advantages, I use the branch to smash the wolf’s head, I nearly beaten the wolf, but after a while, I find out it’s just want to “play” with me, and let me become tired, then I will be its dinner.        

    The wolf howls and try to bite me, I can feel its smelly warm breathe; I can see the hemophilic eyes stare at me in an unfriendly way. I am run out of energy, I may faint at every second. I’m sure that I’ll die in these ruthless woods.

    The wolf tries to use its mighty claws suppress me; I exert all my efforts and block the offensive by a strong branch. By an accident, I fall down. The wolf gets the perfect spot to kill its poor dinner; me.

    Some sticky yucky spit drop on my chicks, I know I’m near to another world.

I can see the important parts’ images pass by like a silence movie. On my three years old birthday party, I got a yellow stripes pajama. On the first day of elementary, I pee on my brand-new school uniform. The first time I went to the most peaceful place; a church. The first time I got caught playing computer games while I should be studying. My crazy junior high school, which I studied hard every night. A special program calls Presidential Classroom. A college hiking club......

“Tock tock tock.” Is that my illusion? I can hear the sound of a helicopter. “Bang!” the wolf howls in a weak way then it faints. I see a needle-like thing insert on its bum.

“I found him” a guy hangs on a rope yell “he’s over there!” he comes down and says “We try to find the last place where you use your cell phone sent distress signals.” “Oh, thank you, thank you...” I don’t know what I really want to say, tears drops from my face, I survive, I survive, and I survive!

Thank god. 

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GINA
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2010/05/23 20:02

LIKE THIS ONE SO MUCH


Candace
passing by to say hi =)
2009/12/16 21:15

well, well, well.....

now i get to see the part about me = =|||   very.......creative and imaginative, XD

anyways, keep up ur stories and i'm gonna follow it :)

Jia-yo! hehe...

鼎樂(aw960709) 於 2009-12-23 06:37 回覆:

謝謝妳

妳想有什麼結果呢?

XD


黃郁棋(灰狼)
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2009/12/10 23:23

Jesus Christ...

我真不想承認你不過十三歲這個事實。

由於中西文化差異,我寫英文作文始終不敢輕易跳脫「制式」框框,

就是先來個Topic Sentence,再由大分支到小分支,然後前後呼應。

雖然無聊,至少邏輯不會亂。

但是這種安全的寫法不能用在寫小說,

你還滿不錯的。


鼎樂(aw960709) 於 2009-12-23 06:39 回覆:

謝謝誇獎

其實這篇只是回家功課

我寫完後順手PO上

 

有靈感就能寫啦